Essay

Honestly, throughout the first three fourths of the essay i was mildly impressed by his topic and the information he presented. It was not until the line 59 where he uses "But some other wrestling fans that know the business just as good as me" that i began to see how horribly written this paper was. He had several cases of missing comma's and incorrect tenses, and he had no direct thesis to follow which i believe is a must in a good essay or paper. Because of all these things i award him a C- because im sure he tried really hard. NOT. I liked the topic as it was interesting to read and learn from but he should have found more sources and possibly should have proofread it before he submitted it, because many of the mistakes were obvious.